Commonplace Essay

Our essays are much different than what we have read on commonplace. no commonplace essay that i have read has been longer than a 5 minute read or around two pages long. the hard part i feel converting my essay will be shortening it and putting my opinion in it more. in most of the published essays their opinion is so strong. one other difference is the lack for a primary source for a majority of the essays. this wil not be a problem for me because the hard part for me in our RAP was getting a promary source and analysising it. in commonplace i read mainly secondary sources and information that let me know the author was well educated in their topic.

I feel like my topic is timely because it is happening right now. for that same reason it is relevent because steroids in baseball is important to alot of people. making my work compelling my be the hardest part of this essay. i look forward to converting my RAP into a commonplace essay and hope it will get published.

what i want

family is very important to me. they keep me grounded and keep me headed in the right direction. if i start to change course or get of course they wont let that happen. they always are looking out for me and support everything that i do. my family consist of me my brother and my mom and dad. the 3 of them mean the world to me and i really look up to my parents. my one brother is older than me so i can look up to him as well and ask him anything and he will try to help me the best he can.
sports are also very important to me in life. i love to play and watch all sports. my favorite sport to play is baseball and to watch is either basketball or football. sports keep me in shape and active. i am really competitive so i hate to lose and always do my best to help my team win. without sports i would be out of shape and really lazy, so im glad that i am able to play them as often as i want.

Thesis

Throughout high school my english teachers tried to make thesis statement very important to our papers. I feel that they didnt do that great of a job teaching it. The most I have learned in the 4 years there is that the thesis statement is supposed to tell the reader what the paper is about. That if the reader only reads the thesis he/she can summarize most of the paper. I think through experience that this is true but i know there is so much more that goes into thesis'.

Writing Analytically did a great job describing what a thesis statement is. The book said that a good thesis is one that makes a claim and makes a point to your readers about your overall subject. It also says how to make a thesis and how to revise and old one. it gives examples of good and bad thesis' and says whats wrong with the bad ones. WA is a great tool for devoloping and learning what a thesis statement is.